This engaging “Gonna-get-my-man” short packs a lot of punch given its size and I thoroughly enjoyed it. A fast read, due to nice interactive passages and terrific dialogue, it was easy to fall into the skin of the determined, virgin-on-a-mission, Jonah and the bewildered object of his affection, Laurie.
In an attempt to get Laurie to see him in a romantic light rather than as the pesky little brother of his best friend, Jonah comes up with a plan and asks Laurie to take his virginity. To Jonah’s mind, the plan is perfect, everyone knows your first time should be special and Laurie will probably go for it, especially after he learns how Jonah’s high school boyfriend dumped him because Jonah wouldn’t put out. And Jonah plans to make his first time so memorable that Laurie will have no choice but to realize the two of them were meant to be.
Laurie has a very real problem, his best friend’s little brother wants his help, help he can’t provide. Well he could provide, he wants to provide, but taking Jonah’s virginity would mean the end of his friendship with his straight best friend Marc. It’s not like he hasn’t noticed that Jonah is not so little anymore, but Laurie can’t go there. He’ll continue to fight his feelings for Jonah, because to act on them—well Marc would kill him! It would definitely end their long-standing friendship, for sure. But when Laurie finds Jonah cozied up with Travis, a guy he knows from experience is not the man for Jonah, Laurie is forced to confront his feelings and makes a decision.
The resulting tale is a sweet, light delight, as Jonah’s scheme to get his man plays out. For some reason Laurie for me took on the persona of a young Hugh Grant and Jonah was Taylor Lautner of Twilight fame. My point being that this is great fantasy fodder because I think that readers will be able to easily plug whomever into the roles of the two leads, because the tight dialogue and descriptive references gift of the story with a swift, assertive rhythm which to me cried out short gay film.
Both leads were adorable, the bad guy was just bad enough, and Marc made a nice pillar-of-strength-almost-matchmaker in his supporting role as best friend and older brother. Jonah’s first time was well undertaken, with a nice nod to safe sex and a “sweet and tasty” heat rating from me. All in all, this is a stimulating, honeyed sweetmeat of a tale that will serve very well as a palate cleanser between larger novels.
Thank you, Piper Vaughn, this was my intro to your work and definitely encouraged me to look for more.
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