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Dear potential reader,
Please allow me save you some time and let you know that this story is horrid and has absolutely NO redeeming qualities. Please move onto the next book on your list and spare yourself the agony of trying to read this worthless piece of literature (using the term literature loosely as I have read more intriguing plots on the bathroom walls of truck stops). If you wish to know specifically why this book was so bad, please feel free to continue reading, but stopping now and moving on to something more worth your time is advisable.
You're still here? Okay, let's begin then. First, let me state that despite my headline I know that a grown man wrote this. I had to make sure since it sounds like the ramblings of a 6th grade boy, so I did some research and found out that he is in fact a grown man. That being said, he should be ashamed of himself for putting this out there and actually charging money for it. It's obvious that he has decided to self-publish because he couldn't get any self-respecting agent to represent it, then went off to a review shop and paid for a bunch of positive reviews in order to sucker poor readers into purchasing this trash. Shameful!
I purchased this book on my kindle after reading a lot of really great reviews for this. There were a lot of references saying this was a great book for those that liked Hunger Games or Harry Potter and how it was a good, fun read. Those people are either liars, fools, or were paid massive amounts of money.
After downloading it I was eager to start reading. It started slow with hunting a wild boar in the jungle, which confuses me since we later find out that the city in which they live is in the desert. Then again, the writer seems to think that it's okay to have a city in the desert but have vines growing everywhere. I used to live near a desert and never saw a vine (or a boar for that matter) anywhere near there.
I tried to not let these `little details' interfere with my `suspension of disbelief' and continued on with the story. So we go from a mediocre hunting trip to Mara getting hurt. Mara, as it turns out, is thirteen (just like our hero Talis) and the granddaughter of the king. She is allowed to go hunting boars with another thirteen year old without any guards, or anything. I find this unlikely, but sure, why not. Inevitably she gets injured and nearly killed and when her mother finds out she's furious. She blames Talis and tells him to never come back.
Skip ahead and we're at the town market place where Talis meets another kid that he is supposed to fight for the "Blood Dagger" (a really important championship fight that is the very next day). This "waddling fat kid" he meets is one of the champions of the arena and a master swordsman. They exchange a few words and the fat kid pulls down his pants and blows a "smokey fart" at Talis (which is gross...who writes that sort of thing???). I don't know about anyone else, but if someone did that to me I would have given them a `steel enema' with my sword. Talis, being the helpless wimp that he is, breathes it in, laughs it off and happily goes home where he meets Mara who is now miraculously healed and ready for the tournament tomorrow.
Mara tells him that she has just found out that her parents are going to make her marry some thirty year old, fat, baron next year (you remember she's only thirteen, right?). Talis doesn't seem to care but she drags him with her to pray to the god of losers for help. They make a pinky swear to win the tournament the next day so Mara doesn't have to get hitched to fat thirty year old baron.
Then we come to the Big Event, the fight for the Blood Dagger (ooo, aahhhh, gasp). We need to back up real quick and emphasize how important this apparently is. Holding the Blood Dagger brings a lot of honor to the families that hold it. The competition is held once a year and while there is no magic allowed (too bad since child mages are the ones fighting in it), weapons are allowed and people can be killed (as demonstrated as how it was said three times that in previous matches Rikar cut off some kids head). If Talis/Mara wins then Talis' daddy will finally love him more than his dead older brother and Mara won't have to be the victim of pedophilia at the hands of some old baron.
Their rivals (also thirteen year olds as far as I can tell) are master magicians (neither Mara or Talis can so much as pick their noses with magic) but this is a melee battle so they are on equal ground in this respect. Well, equal except for the fact that the other two kids are apparently master swordsmen in addition to mages(even the fat kid...but let's not point that out).
So, they have this `Epic' battle between children, to the possible death and while all the contenders arrive there are no spectators mentioned. There don't seem to be any fans to watch the fight, no parents to root for their kids, not even the people that organize the matches. The only ones there are the kids, a single healer who only seems to be interested in eating his nachos or something and one referee.
Not only that, but the only ones in this competition are the champions and Talis/Mara. There are no other kids trying to compete for the dagger? I guess the parents of those kids have more sense than to let their children fight to the death over a silly dagger that really doesn't get you anything. I would have at least expected some discussion about spectators. People love to watch a good fight. Even if it's between kids if a fight breaks out people will flock to it like moths to a flame.
Let's forget all logic as it pertains to huge important competitive events (think Superbowl) and focus on what actually happens. The fight spans a couple pages and consists of some awkward attacks made by our heroes that get easily deflected by the bad kids. Mara gets knocked down and injured again but is able to keep fighting and then Talis basically stumbles on Rikar and cuts him on the hip. The wound sounds trivial but Rikar is somehow unable to fight anymore so Talis/Mara win! Yay! Let's also forget the fact that they have one more opponent that is still standing and can fight just fine (the waddling fat kid). Rikar is down and they get the blood dagger. Everyone can go home happy.
Everything in this book up to this point is ludicrous. Scenes change instantly without any transition. You go from outside the city, to inside, then to a temple, and then to some weird restaurant where the waitress hates Mara for no apparent reason. People's actions make no sense whatsoever except as filler and a convenient way to move the story (or lack thereof) along.
I attempted to read this book 5-6 times over the last month, thinking that I could trudge my way through it but by the end of chapter six I gave up. The story is difficult (at best) to follow and is impossible to believe in. The main character Talis is shallow and cowardly. The infrastructure of the civilization, culture, gods and magic make no sense and there isn't enough detail in this story to fill a hat.
I'm done with this author and fully intend to do my best to warn others of his under-handed tactics in trying to market this crap. Don't get me wrong, I have nothing against self-published books. There are a LOT of really great ones out there...this just isn't one of them.
However, I expect that a self-published book be put through at least some rigorous editing and test reading before it's thrown out into the public. There is a reason why traditionally published books sell so well and that's because of the stringent level of proof-reading they go through before they see the light of day. This book hasn't benefited from any of that.
I do hope this helps other readers keep from wasting time on this nonsense. If you do decide to read it, I wish you the best of luck.